Eastern time is 2 hours ahead of me, which made it 9:59 PM. Due to scheduling snafu (which I thought I would have been off three hours earlier), I was unable to post prior to deadline, unfortunately.
And yeah, that not commenting was due to a lack of internet access. And there's less of an 'arc' and more of an anecdote here.
Well, I must agree that the lack of a story arc puzzled me initially, but I liked the humour and level of personal involveness nonetheless. Certainly amused me more than any other submission so far.
1. Touch on the other characters a bit more. As far as I see, the only survivors wo are really mentioned are the old man and the protagonist; the young guys and others are barely even mentioned. If they're each going to take on the narrative role later, it's important that the reader should have an impression on them beforehand.
2. Make it a bit clearer about the "zombie" plot. The protagonist seems more interested in recounting his history than giving a clear impression of the carnage happening downstairs; as a result, it may not be immediately obvious what is going on.
Just my two cents. But continue with the story; it seems interesting so far.
Dawn of Penance4UW
Instant (Uncommon)
Affinity for blocking creatures (This spell costs 1 less to play for each blocking creature you control.)
Return up to two target attacking creatures to their owner’s hand. You gain life equal to the total power of creatures returned this way. The first rays of daybreak possess a power that neither priest nor cleric can ever hope to emulate.
Artist: KaiserFlames at Deviantart.com
Aven Seawarden4UW
Creature - Bird Soldier (Unc)
Flying WW, T: The next creature spell you play this turn has flash. UU, T: Return target creature you control to its owner's hand. Avens make excellent scouts. Their strong eyes can survey the horizon for miles, and their deafening screech carries messages within seconds.
3/3
Oops, sorry... Freaks is a how-to-draw book that teaches you how to draw anthros. I just remember seeing a picture in the book that looks almost exactly like your submission, but maybe it's just a conincidence.
Seems like a reasonable card, but the lack of flavour text hurts, especially considering how bland the package is on its own.
B
MobiusMan
The ability feels rather red to me rather than green. Like Blackbull, the lack of flavour text hurts.
B-
RukarumelFieldJournal
The ability feels dsitinctly off colour, but is one of the more creative ones. BTW, me luvs the flavour text.
B+
Von Kriplespac
A strong card that wonderfully embodies green's hate for flying. The flavour text is also easily the best this round.
A+
Hemlock
Congrats on being the only person this round to think of delving into another colour (not a bad decision; the catbeast DOES look white-ish to me.) The power level pretty reasonable, but as always, the lack of flavour text hurts.
A well-balanced effort, although its effect seems more like a common than uncommon to me. Good try with the flavour text, though.
B
Illuminations
Pretty powerful for its cost; I can see this card as a reasonable beater. The flavour isn't overly flamboyant, but works well.
B+
cannon
I don't quite see the synergy between the abilities, and the wording is slightly off (it should read "Target creature loses flying until end of turn.")
B-
JqlGirl
The usage of this card seems very situational and somewhat pointless. However, the flavour of the package works nicely.
A
Ikeda
The aim of this round was primarily to create an original ability for the card that FEELS uncommon, and I felt you did that relatively well. But the flavour text feels osmewhat outta place.
B+
Well, I must agree that the lack of a story arc puzzled me initially, but I liked the humour and level of personal involveness nonetheless. Certainly amused me more than any other submission so far.
1. Touch on the other characters a bit more. As far as I see, the only survivors wo are really mentioned are the old man and the protagonist; the young guys and others are barely even mentioned. If they're each going to take on the narrative role later, it's important that the reader should have an impression on them beforehand.
2. Make it a bit clearer about the "zombie" plot. The protagonist seems more interested in recounting his history than giving a clear impression of the carnage happening downstairs; as a result, it may not be immediately obvious what is going on.
Just my two cents. But continue with the story; it seems interesting so far.
Instant
Target chauvinistic non-Pig, non-chocolate Pig becomes a big and hurt god-king ninja.
Instant (Uncommon)
Affinity for blocking creatures (This spell costs 1 less to play for each blocking creature you control.)
Return up to two target attacking creatures to their owner’s hand. You gain life equal to the total power of creatures returned this way.
The first rays of daybreak possess a power that neither priest nor cleric can ever hope to emulate.
Artist: KaiserFlames at Deviantart.com
Creature - Bird Soldier (Unc)
Flying
WW, T: The next creature spell you play this turn has flash.
UU, T: Return target creature you control to its owner's hand.
Avens make excellent scouts. Their strong eyes can survey the horizon for miles, and their deafening screech carries messages within seconds.
3/3
A link to the art pictured, for those who want to make renders: http://www.waynereynolds.com/Card%20Art%20(inc%20MTG)/Thumbnails/TalonrakeAven.jpg
Oops, sorry... Freaks is a how-to-draw book that teaches you how to draw anthros. I just remember seeing a picture in the book that looks almost exactly like your submission, but maybe it's just a conincidence.
B
MobiusMan
B-
RukarumelFieldJournal
B+
Von Kriplespac
A+
Hemlock
And the winner is:
keeperofzion24
B
Illuminations
B+
cannon
B-
JqlGirl
A
B+
And BTW, thanks Kaldra.
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