I'm not sure why one would use a spoiler tag in this context? Word of Command on a creature does not strike me as a good idea regardless of whether it takes an unacceptable amount of text or not.
Here's some rare stuff I'm looking at for Guashan!
Celestial Tianlong
Creature — Dragon Spirit (R)
Flying
Whenever Celestial Tianlong enters the battlefield or attacks, tap up to two target creatures.
4/4
Sacred Hand
Instant (R)
Target creature you control deals damage equal to its power to each attacking or blocking creature you don’t control.
Wise Shenlong
Creature — Dragon Spirit (R)
Flying
Whenever Wise Shenlong enters the battlefield or attacks, up to two creatures can’t be blocked this turn.
4/4
Cunning Dilong
Creature — Dragon Spirit (R)
Flying
When Cunning Dilong enters the battlefield or attacks, up to two target creatures get -1/-1 until end of turn.
4/4
Whirlpool Sword Style
Sorcery (R)
You may attach an Equipment you control to target creature you control. Then that creature deals damage equal to its power to up to four targets.
Mighty Jiaolong
Creature — Dragon Spirit (R)
Flying
When Mighty Jiaolong enters the battlefield or attacks, up to two target creatures get +2/+2 until end of turn.
4/4
Princess of the Moon
Creature — Faerie Wizard (R)
Whenever Princess of the Moon or another Faerie enters the battlefield under your control, look at the top and bottom cards of your library. You may exchange them.
1/5
Red Thread of Fate
Enchantment (R)
Blessing (This turn, if you paid 4 or more mana to cast a noncreature spell, you’re blessed.)
At the beginning of each end step, if you’re blessed, you may have target creature deal damage equal to its power to its controller, then gain control of it.
Do you mean Chant lets you cast copies from exile?
Because I _think_ the way it's written now, you'd get to cast it once from exile, and it would then end up in your graveyard. Not that that's not interesting, but it's fairly unintuitive.
Yes, it's intended to work more like rebound than cipher. You get one secondary cast out of it. It's a bit hard to read, that's true, but I have tested it and it works fine at the table.
Oh man, I didn't check my MSE export. No idea why it didn't include reminder text! Here's the ability texts for both of those:
Chant X (If you cast this for X, exile it as it resolves. Whenever a creature you control deals combat damage to a player, you may cast it without paying its mana cost.)
Blessing (This turn, if you paid 4 or more mana to cast a noncreature spell, you’re blessed.)
Thanks for the individual card feedback! I'll put some thought into Sink Into Silence especially; I want blue to have a cheap conditional counter, but I'm not sure what design is best for this set. The powerlevel concerns on other cards are also noted; I'm not a great dev guy, so I expected there to be some numerical issues.
CU05 Sink Into Silence
Instant (C)
Counter target spell unless its controller has each player draw a card.
CU06 Wavestep Xia
Creature — Human Monk (C)
Kicker (You may pay an additional as you cast this spell.)
When CU06 Wavestep Xia enters the battlefield, if it was kicked, draw a card.
CU06 Wavestep Xia can’t block or be blocked.
2/1
CU07 Zhiwan Bay Jelly
Creature — Jellyfish (C)
Defender
Whenever CU07 Zhiwan Bay Jelly blocks a creature, that creature doesn’t untap during its controller’s next untap step.
0/3
CU08 Lightfoot
Enchantment — Aura (C)
Enchant creature
Enchanted creature has flying and prowess.
CU09 Hummingbird's Advice
Instant (C)
Choose one—
• Draw a card, then discard a card.
• Return target creature you control to its owner’s hand.
• Tap or untap target creature.
CU10 Tengshe
Creature — Fish Bird (C)
Flying
When CU10 Tengshe enters the battlefield, scry 2.
1/3
CU11 Scrolls of the Ages
Instant (C)
Blessing
If you’re blessed, scry 2.
Draw two cards, then discard a card.
CU12 Heavenly Protection
Instant (C)
Counter target spell. If you own a card in exile, draw a card.
CU13 Mirrorthrower Liang
Creature — Faerie Wizard (C)
When CU13 Mirrorthrower Liang enters the battlefield, return target creature you don’t control to its owner’s hand.
2/3
“You May pay an additional 1 as you cast spells.” is sweet enough to be a bonified mechanic!
Won’t the “whenever” triggers following it ALL trigger from just one additional 1 though?
This is an interesting rules point and I hope I can get it figured out! My reading was that it works like the recent cards with "When you do" texts (and so maybe I should use that wording); each ability, separately, gives you an opportunity to pay an extra 1 and says what happens if you take that exact opportunity.
Hey friends! It's been a while since I posted, and I wanted to come back with a new set. This is Guashan, a battlecruiser style set themed after Journey to the West. White commons incoming!
CW01 Elite VanguardW
Creature — Human Soldier (C)
2/1
CW02 Humble CultivationW
Enchantment — Aura (C)
Enchant creature
Enchanted creature has vigilance.
You may pay 1 as an additional cost to cast spells. Whenever you do, put a +1/+1 counter on enchanted creature.
CW04 Serene ShelterW
Instant (C)
Untap up to one target creature. It gains indestructible until end of turn. You gain 3 life.
CW05 Carp Painter1W
Creature — Human Wizard (C)
Flash
When CW05 Carp Painter enters the battlefield, create a 1/1 white Spirit creature token.
1/1
CW06 Daoling Archivist1W
Creature — Human Monk (C)
Kicker 3(You may pay an additional 3 as you cast this spell.)
When CW06 Daoling Archivist enters the battlefield, if it was kicked, scry 2.
1/3
CW07 For All Under Heaven1W
Instant (C)
Kicker 2W(You may pay an additional 2W as you cast this spell.)
Creatures you control get +1/+1 until end of turn. If CW07 For All Under Heaven was kicked, untap those creatures and they gain first strike until end of turn.
CW08 Sage of the PearlWW
Creature — Human Wizard (C)
You may pay an additional 1 to cast spells. Whenever you do, tap target creature.
2/2
CW09 Wushu SwordsmanWW
Creature — Human Warrior (C)
Blessing (Whenever you pay 5 or more mana to cast a spell, bless this.)
Lifelink
Whenever you bless CW09 Wushu Swordsman, it gets +2/+2 until end of turn.
2/2
CW10 Beckon Through Gates2W
Instant (C)
Kicker 2(You may pay an additional 2 as you cast this spell.)
Exile target creature. Its controller gains life equal to its toughness. If CW10 Beckon Through Gates was kicked, scry 2.
CW11 Tiger Sifu2W
Creature — Spirit Cat (C)
When CW11 Tiger Sifu enters the battlefield, if you control an enchantment, scry 2.
3/1
CW12 Tsang Monk2W
Creature — Human Monk (C)
Defender
When CW12 Tsang Monk dies, create a 1/1 white Spirit creature token.
1/5
CW14 Nightingales Help2WW
Instant (C)
Up to three target creatures you control get +2/+2 and gain flying until end of turn.
CW15 Windtamer Training3W
Enchantment — Aura (C)
Enchant creature
Enchanted creature gets +1/+1 and has flying.
Whenever enchanted creature deals combat damage to a player, exile target creature that player controls until the beginning of its owner’s next end step.
CW16 Breeding Pheasant3W
Creature — Bird (C)
Flying
Blessing (Whenever you pay 5 or more mana to cast a spell, bless this.)
Whenever you bless CW16 Breeding Pheasant, create a 1/1 white Bird creature token with flying.
3/2
CW17 Sound the Drum4W
Sorcery (C)
Exile target creature. Creatures you control get +1/+1 until end of turn.
CW18 Qilin Advisor4WW
Creature — Kirin Advisor (C)
Flying
Whenever CW18 Qilin Advisor deals combat damage to a player, scry 2.
3/3
Man, guys, I'm terribly sorry about this, I had a huge storm of family related stuff to deal with. I'll try to get something in tomorrow, but if I can't make it, I think perhaps it would be nice to offer my position in the final to the runner-up? I dunno?
sorry all for my terrible midnight card formatting
Raptorchan
This is a weird Trap. If you look at the Traps that exist, the generalization is that they all get their cost reduction from a thing happening, either "if (restriction) creature(s) is/are attacking" or "if (an event happened) this turn."
So on that basis I think this could be improved if its cost restriction were "If a planeswalker etb under an opponent's control this turn." As-written the card doesn't fit the present mechanical identity of traps or the flavor identity (something bad happens to you if you make a misstep.)
I don't know why this other card needs split second. At the cost it has, it might be oppressive, since it destroys low-toughness hordes and also sets up multiple-turn stalls for low-power attackers.
Cardz5000
Ego Nullification is weird as heck! I wonder if it's problematic that it becomes a powerful tool in decks using Echo Tracer, Voidmage Apprentice or Fathom Seer, or if that's a cool Johnny tool waiting to be discovered. At 6 mana though, how are you getting it onto the table?
Mimetic Membrane has a really funny take on the Illusion ability. Well done.
Hemlock
Going to say again what I said to Raptorchan—I think Trap triggers should strictly be events. This is a wonderful dramatic moment in a card, apart from that.
I don't like the chroma in Altar of Serra's mechanic, but it's pretty rad overall.
Fairy Banquet Trap [mana]4UU[/mana
Instant — Trap (M)
If an opponent put a +1/+1 counter on a creature this turn, you may pay U rather than pay this spell's mana cost.
Exile any number of target creatures. For each creature exiled this way, its controller creates a 2/2 green Boar creature token.
Mirror Aegis 2W
Creature — Spirit Wall (R)
Defender
If a creature would deal damage to Mirror Aegis, that creature deals it to its controller instead. WW: Target attacking creature becomes blocked by Mirror Aegis.
0/4
Celestial Tianlong
Creature — Dragon Spirit (R)
Flying
Whenever Celestial Tianlong enters the battlefield or attacks, tap up to two target creatures.
4/4
Sacred Hand
Instant (R)
Target creature you control deals damage equal to its power to each attacking or blocking creature you don’t control.
Wise Shenlong
Creature — Dragon Spirit (R)
Flying
Whenever Wise Shenlong enters the battlefield or attacks, up to two creatures can’t be blocked this turn.
4/4
Cunning Dilong
Creature — Dragon Spirit (R)
Flying
When Cunning Dilong enters the battlefield or attacks, up to two target creatures get -1/-1 until end of turn.
4/4
Whirlpool Sword Style
Sorcery (R)
You may attach an Equipment you control to target creature you control. Then that creature deals damage equal to its power to up to four targets.
Mighty Jiaolong
Creature — Dragon Spirit (R)
Flying
When Mighty Jiaolong enters the battlefield or attacks, up to two target creatures get +2/+2 until end of turn.
4/4
Princess of the Moon
Creature — Faerie Wizard (R)
Whenever Princess of the Moon or another Faerie enters the battlefield under your control, look at the top and bottom cards of your library. You may exchange them.
1/5
Red Thread of Fate
Enchantment (R)
Blessing (This turn, if you paid 4 or more mana to cast a noncreature spell, you’re blessed.)
At the beginning of each end step, if you’re blessed, you may have target creature deal damage equal to its power to its controller, then gain control of it.
Chant X (If you cast this for X, exile it as it resolves. Whenever a creature you control deals combat damage to a player, you may cast it without paying its mana cost.)
Blessing (This turn, if you paid 4 or more mana to cast a noncreature spell, you’re blessed.)
Thanks for the individual card feedback! I'll put some thought into Sink Into Silence especially; I want blue to have a cheap conditional counter, but I'm not sure what design is best for this set. The powerlevel concerns on other cards are also noted; I'm not a great dev guy, so I expected there to be some numerical issues.
CU01 Wavecraft Student
Creature — Human Monk (C)
Prowess
0/2
CU02 Flutter
Instant (C)
Target creature gains flying until end of turn. Target creature gets -2/-0 until end of turn.
CU03 Vanish
Instant (C)
Chant 2U
Return target creature to its owner’s hand.
CU04 Wisdom Elixir
Instant (C)
Chant 2U
Scry 1. Draw a card.
CU05 Sink Into Silence
Instant (C)
Counter target spell unless its controller has each player draw a card.
CU06 Wavestep Xia
Creature — Human Monk (C)
Kicker
When CU06 Wavestep Xia enters the battlefield, if it was kicked, draw a card.
CU06 Wavestep Xia can’t block or be blocked.
2/1
CU07 Zhiwan Bay Jelly
Creature — Jellyfish (C)
Defender
Whenever CU07 Zhiwan Bay Jelly blocks a creature, that creature doesn’t untap during its controller’s next untap step.
0/3
CU08 Lightfoot
Enchantment — Aura (C)
Enchant creature
Enchanted creature has flying and prowess.
CU09 Hummingbird's Advice
Instant (C)
Choose one—
• Draw a card, then discard a card.
• Return target creature you control to its owner’s hand.
• Tap or untap target creature.
CU10 Tengshe
Creature — Fish Bird (C)
Flying
When CU10 Tengshe enters the battlefield, scry 2.
1/3
CU11 Scrolls of the Ages
Instant (C)
Blessing
If you’re blessed, scry 2.
Draw two cards, then discard a card.
CU12 Heavenly Protection
Instant (C)
Counter target spell. If you own a card in exile, draw a card.
CU13 Mirrorthrower Liang
Creature — Faerie Wizard (C)
When CU13 Mirrorthrower Liang enters the battlefield, return target creature you don’t control to its owner’s hand.
2/3
CU14 Liang Hierolune
Creature — Faerie Cleric (C)
Hexproof
3/2
CU15 Torrential Bixi
Creature — Fish Dragon (C)
vanilla
2/5
CU16 Waveshaping
Sorcery (C)
Tap up to two target creatures. Those creatures don’t untap during their controller’s next untap step. Scry 1.
CU17 Become Carp
Sorcery (C)
Up to two target creatures you control can’t be blocked this turn. Draw a card.
CU18 Cranewing Liang
Creature — Faerie Warrior (C)
Flash, flying
3/3
I'm still feeling around for a third or maybe even fourth set mechanic. One I'm considering is Potential, eg
3W: Potential 3. (If this creature has fewer than three +1/+1 counters on it, put a +1/+1 counter on it.)
I'm not sure, though; it is a creature-restricted mechanic and that makes it rather tight, especially since Blessing can only go on permanents.
CW01 Elite Vanguard W
Creature — Human Soldier (C)
2/1
CW02 Humble Cultivation W
Enchantment — Aura (C)
Enchant creature
Enchanted creature has vigilance.
You may pay 1 as an additional cost to cast spells. Whenever you do, put a +1/+1 counter on enchanted creature.
CW03 Sealkeeper W
Creature — Human Cleric (C)
1W, Sacrifice CW03 Sealkeeper: Destroy target enchantment.
1/2
CW04 Serene Shelter W
Instant (C)
Untap up to one target creature. It gains indestructible until end of turn. You gain 3 life.
CW05 Carp Painter 1W
Creature — Human Wizard (C)
Flash
When CW05 Carp Painter enters the battlefield, create a 1/1 white Spirit creature token.
1/1
CW06 Daoling Archivist 1W
Creature — Human Monk (C)
Kicker 3 (You may pay an additional 3 as you cast this spell.)
When CW06 Daoling Archivist enters the battlefield, if it was kicked, scry 2.
1/3
CW07 For All Under Heaven 1W
Instant (C)
Kicker 2W (You may pay an additional 2W as you cast this spell.)
Creatures you control get +1/+1 until end of turn. If CW07 For All Under Heaven was kicked, untap those creatures and they gain first strike until end of turn.
CW08 Sage of the Pearl WW
Creature — Human Wizard (C)
You may pay an additional 1 to cast spells. Whenever you do, tap target creature.
2/2
CW09 Wushu Swordsman WW
Creature — Human Warrior (C)
Blessing (Whenever you pay 5 or more mana to cast a spell, bless this.)
Lifelink
Whenever you bless CW09 Wushu Swordsman, it gets +2/+2 until end of turn.
2/2
CW10 Beckon Through Gates 2W
Instant (C)
Kicker 2 (You may pay an additional 2 as you cast this spell.)
Exile target creature. Its controller gains life equal to its toughness. If CW10 Beckon Through Gates was kicked, scry 2.
CW11 Tiger Sifu 2W
Creature — Spirit Cat (C)
When CW11 Tiger Sifu enters the battlefield, if you control an enchantment, scry 2.
3/1
CW12 Tsang Monk 2W
Creature — Human Monk (C)
Defender
When CW12 Tsang Monk dies, create a 1/1 white Spirit creature token.
1/5
CW13 Nurturing Crane 1WW
Creature — Bird (C)
Flying, lifelink
2/2
CW14 Nightingales Help 2WW
Instant (C)
Up to three target creatures you control get +2/+2 and gain flying until end of turn.
CW15 Windtamer Training 3W
Enchantment — Aura (C)
Enchant creature
Enchanted creature gets +1/+1 and has flying.
Whenever enchanted creature deals combat damage to a player, exile target creature that player controls until the beginning of its owner’s next end step.
CW16 Breeding Pheasant 3W
Creature — Bird (C)
Flying
Blessing (Whenever you pay 5 or more mana to cast a spell, bless this.)
Whenever you bless CW16 Breeding Pheasant, create a 1/1 white Bird creature token with flying.
3/2
CW17 Sound the Drum 4W
Sorcery (C)
Exile target creature. Creatures you control get +1/+1 until end of turn.
CW18 Qilin Advisor 4WW
Creature — Kirin Advisor (C)
Flying
Whenever CW18 Qilin Advisor deals combat damage to a player, scry 2.
3/3
This is a weird Trap. If you look at the Traps that exist, the generalization is that they all get their cost reduction from a thing happening, either "if (restriction) creature(s) is/are attacking" or "if (an event happened) this turn."
So on that basis I think this could be improved if its cost restriction were "If a planeswalker etb under an opponent's control this turn." As-written the card doesn't fit the present mechanical identity of traps or the flavor identity (something bad happens to you if you make a misstep.)
I don't know why this other card needs split second. At the cost it has, it might be oppressive, since it destroys low-toughness hordes and also sets up multiple-turn stalls for low-power attackers.
Cardz5000
Ego Nullification is weird as heck! I wonder if it's problematic that it becomes a powerful tool in decks using Echo Tracer, Voidmage Apprentice or Fathom Seer, or if that's a cool Johnny tool waiting to be discovered. At 6 mana though, how are you getting it onto the table?
Mimetic Membrane has a really funny take on the Illusion ability. Well done.
Hemlock
Going to say again what I said to Raptorchan—I think Trap triggers should strictly be events. This is a wonderful dramatic moment in a card, apart from that.
I don't like the chroma in Altar of Serra's mechanic, but it's pretty rad overall.
2. Hemlock
3. Raptorchan
Instant — Trap (M)
If an opponent put a +1/+1 counter on a creature this turn, you may pay U rather than pay this spell's mana cost.
Exile any number of target creatures. For each creature exiled this way, its controller creates a 2/2 green Boar creature token.
Mirror Aegis 2W
Creature — Spirit Wall (R)
Defender
If a creature would deal damage to Mirror Aegis, that creature deals it to its controller instead.
WW: Target attacking creature becomes blocked by Mirror Aegis.
0/4