Just write it as a multikicker form.
Intensify (You may pay an additional up to twice as you cast this spell)
Target creature can't block this turn.
Smoke Bomb deals 3 damage to that creature if you intensified.
Smoke Bomb deals 5 damage to that creature's controller if you intensified twice.
Very few trios of effects can be written with even a single one of them on a single line, so the additional words don't necessarily add lines, and the wording takes less space if you use a single paragraph as on Tremors (though it's probably going to be 5-6 lines on most cards, I'd assume).
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Sep 9, 2017Oh, I've myself been terrible about sitting down to describe my thoughts. FWIW, I see a lot of interesting things and good designs. My main concern (which might turn out to be incorrect, though, since I haven't actually played the set and you have) is that I'm not always sure how these cards gel together properly (plus occasional color pie concerns, about which I'm admittedly a bit of an obsessed wonk XD).Posted in: Custom Set Creation and Discussion
Sep 6, 2017WhitePosted in: Custom Set Creation and Discussion
- The marshal cards (aside from the various other issues I have with the mechanic) read at levels varying between lackluster-to-average, probably overpowered (Leap into Battle), and so high-costed as to be of dubious usefulness (Blade Storm, Light of Revelation) while simultaneously giving too high bonuses (Tavern Brawl).
- You do NOT have a lifegain archetype or even theme. Without cards that get some sort of bonus from life gain all you have is... well, whatever amount of life gain you've chosen to put into the set.
- Where are the white bears?! Where's the white enchantment removal? Heck, where's the white removal period? White normally gets at least two full-on removal spells in addition to eventual tap effects.
- The 3 life gain on Apostate Healer may be more than needed. It's unusual already for a repeatable common life gain effect to grant more than 1 life.
- I've already said all I had to say about Banish several times. (spoiler: I don't like it)
- Wizards tend to be cautious about efficient and/or evasive lifelinkers like Basilica Ghost at common. I'd be doubly so in a set where Erupt and Marshal seem to conspire to markedly weaken the removal (marshal reduces its amount, erupt reduces it efficiency to reduce the chances of killing lands with it).
- I've said it before and I will say it again: power higher than 3 on a white common like Combat Veteran is out of color pie. (3/5 vigilance would work and still be a very good card)
- Still not sure why a common like Daybreak Defender needs that indestructible line when so little removal can kill it during your own turn in the first place. You have no common, and hardly any uncommon that can kill it. Push that effect to some uncommon and make a standard-level card instead?
- Angelic Spirit feels like a poor puzzle card. I'd swap the effect with that of Apostate Healer. Also, you really have to figure out your off-color effect cycle. Mixing bonus from off-color mana use and activated abilities is already stretching it, but this one now has payment to a triggered ability (and it could just as well cost too)...
- Skull Collecter is not white. I know I've said that guild mechanic allow some bleed, but an ability word has different requirement from a keyword. When the result is the Sengir ability, which is very firmly in G/B, it is no longer merely a color bend.
- I think my biggest issue with white commons is these must help with both Boros and Orzhov wanting to be aggressive (Reap means cards that want to attack too!), and cards like Archer's Tower and Temple Guard are not helping with that, while the individual combat tricks are too lackluster to pierce through in a meaningful way. What you have is an awkward white deck that wants to survive until it can win with a surprise Leap into Battle (a probably overpowered card, as I mentioned: "everything flies" actually does not fly at common) or Angelic Ascension and I'm not sure the noncreature cards actually enable that (reminder that the limited amount of removal means an opposing bomb becomes essentially unanswerable).
- You like big butts and you cannot lie~. Seriously, though, why Archer Squad? Also archers are not an orzhov thing at all.
- Personally, I'm not all-in on the Glint-Sleeve Artisan 3/3 for 2W thing, so obviously I think Card Name (make it an accountant :P). My biggest issue with it is white getting ramping and fixing for no good reason. Again, this should be black (admittedly, white is somewhat lacking in abilities that fit well here, this is the sort of problems that you don't notice until you have to make cards with the mechanic.).
- False Humility looks like a weird riff of Shadow Lance. Oh, and also what made you think it was okay to put the shade ability in white?
- Is Glaring Truth how you intend to power your "enchantment theme"? By bleeding a blue ability into white via a card that's not really good enough for limited (it could just as well go on a creature, maybe even a common one)?
- Wow. Spirit of Serenity is a very, VERY good Fiend Hunter variant, what with the whole "keep it off another turn" shtick. However returning the "bounce on stack" trick to standard may not be a good idea (is "if the exiled card would be put anywhere else, put it into its owner's hand instead" functional to get around that?), and that first ability is awfully awkward.
- I like how Aegis Knight is a baby Aegis Angel. I'm not sure if flash can be included at that cost, but these days it's hard to tell what's considered an acceptable cost on a rare...
Sep 2, 2017I see where Marshal is trying to go, I really do. I just hope making that destination an uncounterable overload (You even use the "each creature" wording on the noncommon ones!) is as unsatisfying for you as it is for us looking at these cards. The other four mechanics look fine to me. I'll have a card-by-card commentary later on.Posted in: Custom Set Creation and Discussion
The more I think about marshall, the less I like it:
- It uses up slots that could/ought to be used for other types of spells: protection spells, removal, tapping, the auras for your purported orzhov theme etc.
- It doesn't work that well with an aggressive r/w deck (you want very few actual marshal spells, probably no more than a single, maybe two Leap into Battle, and a lot of creatures)
- The red cards don't work too well with Erupt (Erupt means you WILL lose lands along the way and, even with the terrible removal, and you have no significant ramping in G/R) and neither work well with Mutate (you already have a mana sink) either.
- It limits what you can actually do on a combat trick.
Aug 21, 2017Posted in: Custom Card RulingsQuote from BlackTempleGaurdian »I'm confused.
You want this to be able to survive a 2/3 with three +1/+1 counters on it (thus a 5/6), or this with three +1/+1 counters on it (a 6/6) to survive a 2/3?
If you want this with three +1/+1 counters on it (6/6) to survive a 2/3 with three +1/+1 counters on it (5/6), currently it does (for the same reason a creature that has been Giant Growth'd doesn't start to die at the end of the turn).
I had to go dig up into the rules to check up on this (I wasn't sure when the trigger resolved relative to the automated actions). The rules actually aren't super clear on it, but imply that actions will resolve after the Cleanup actions (discard, then damage removal, then UEOT effects ending).
Where I wanted to go was that the template is not current "magicese". The correct modern formualtion is "at the beginning of the cleanup step" (Bounty of the Hunt). This trigger has never been used on a new card, and otherwise only to render older card functional. It is almost certainly not compliant with any sensible way to write a modern magic card. An additional problem is that the template "at end of turn" actually translate to a different meaning for 99% of the card that used it! It was originally replaced with "at the beginning of the (next) end step", and that interpretation would not allow this card to survive a fight with a 5/* creature. If you insist on survival, this template may well be the worst solution possible.
Aug 12, 2017Posted in: Custom Card CreationQuote from FourDogsInAHorseSuit »
A creature though isn't a creature when it's not on the battlefield. In your hand it's a creature card.
So if you said "Whenever a player exiles another creature or creature card from anywhere. create..." would work best.
That is incorrect. This exact wording ("Whenever a card is [put in zone X] from anywhere") is already in use for the graveyard: Vulturous Zombie, Tamiyo, the Moon Sage, Quest for Ancient Secrets, Duskmantle Guildmage, Nihilith.
This one is even more straightforard in that it doesn't have the disadvantage of encompassing multiple game term ("put into the graveyard" covers mill, "discard", "destroy", "sacrifice", "dies" and is unlikely to ever appear on a common), so could be used all the more readily.
Jul 30, 2017Posted in: Custom Set Creation and DiscussionQuote from rowanalpha »
The flavor of a Black Spirit from Wraith feels weird, not necessarily bad, but wierd. Innistrad spirits have been almost exclusively white/blue, so why are the wraiths black and not white?
I agree with this point.
Thinking a little more on it it seems to me like the Ward+Crusade combo just clashes against what an Innistrad set means. The marquee mechanics in previous Innistrad sets were graveyard focused: flashback, delirium (with undying, morbid and madness closely related)...
Here, it feels like you tried to aggressively staple a bottom-up "attachment" theme to what needs to a top-down set flavor it has no connection with, and one with multiple already-established mechanical features features at that (double-sided cards, Tribal themes with specific tribe and color combinations, graveyard focus...).
Crusade, as a mechanic name, might be workable for G/W humans, but its mechanical implementation (even the proposed simplifications) doesn't actually fit Innistrad either thematically or mechanically. Ward hasboth that problem and that of being, to be quite honest, painfully obvious of being there solely because it is needed to make crusade work, without even feeling like an actual ward in shape or form because of its overly complex implementation.
Jul 30, 2017I haven't look at much of the set, but I very much agree with kjsharp about ward. A mechanic that does completely different things depending on its target is a serious problem in and of itself. Other issues: it says "ward your/a graveyard" and buries the fact it a) actually wards a card and b) targets in the reminder text. The mere length of the flavor text on blue ward cards (and dear god I hadn't even noticed the convoluted condition, jesus christ) should be ringing massive alarm balls. This is not something that should ever be at common, and I'm not sure a keyword should ever thread anywhere near it. The fact you want to introduce a third variant (not to mention that the choice of GUR is rather mystifying) is extremely concerning.Posted in: Custom Set Creation and Discussion
Blue ward reads like it wants badly to be a flashback variant: Ward N (You may cast this card from your graveyard if there's N or more cards in it, including this one. Then exile it.)
Regarding crusade, I suspect the problem is making it an ETB trigger instead of a "threshold" mechanic. Compare the equipment matter theme in SOI, which used only four cards with threshold 1 (Ironclad Slayer, Militant Inquisitor, Strength of Arms and Open the Armory). Seems to me that something like "Whenever this attacks, if you control an aura or equipment, [effect]" is a much more effective trigger.
Jun 16, 2017Posted in: The Rumor MillQuote from Creedmoor »Quote from ShadowFenril »Wow, the Scorpion God is the kind of new EDH general I've been looking for! But...that name's a little generic isn't it? Sounds like what people would call the card when they can't remember it's official name.
Do we know what the other two Gods might be as far as their animal? We have the Scorpion God... a... Hippo God? Camel God? Haha
I'm guessing the other two gods are gonna be UB and UR.
Jun 16, 2017Overall I really like this revamped set of commons.Posted in: Custom Card Creation
Agree. It's a little borderline for a common too. I can buy 2W Graceful Reprieve (which is the right comparison IMO, not gift) or an aura without flash as a common, but the combination seems more worthy of uncommon. Amazing card name though.Quote from entombedhydra »Re: Stay: This doesn't really feel like an aura (yes, some auras work like this... but it's not how you would describe auras; it's how you'd describe an instant.)
Was Sphinx’s Inspiration always an instant? I'm pretty sure it should be a sorcery.
I still hate, hate, hate Banish. And that Sanctify has gotten powered up (?!?!) is not helping that feeling one one bit. Comparable commons (Angelic Purge, Banishment Decree, Iona's Judgment, Angelic Edict) have mostly been in sets where there was no separate ench/art removal in white. Having two such card feels like overkill. There doesn't seem to be any curve requirement that this be a 5-mana card (unless you just want your white removal to be low quality in general?) so why couldn't this be a 4-mana removal, which are significantly easier to design?
Jun 13, 2017Posted in: Custom Card Creation
- I'm no fan of white removal that can freely hit any creature, so I obviously hate Banish.
Chancery Owls says "obstruct 2" but the reminder says . Which is correct?(I didn't have the time to read the whole thread. The discrepancy should still be fixed.)
- Cirrus Griffin is kinda awkward to evaluate. I commented previously about common 4/4s in white (multicolor doesn't help since blue doesn't get anything like them either). Flying is even more over the top (and the no block is only mildly relevant). Plus this is a very unusual cost for a UW multicolor card. Instead of being flavored as a primarily white flying thing, could this be made into a 4/4 Serpent with first strike or some other white ability instead?
- I really like Collective Strength as Sigil Blessing for extra . Thumb up!
- Deliberations is neat and simple, but I really want a small effect tacked on it, like giving vigilance to/untapping something, or life gain.
- Function Injunction is undercosted. the basic cost for this is 2U (Paralyzing Grasp, Spectral Prison). I could see it as a straight (it's about halfway between UU and 2U IMO, cf. Containment Membrane vs. Bonds of Quicksilver), but not costed down.
- Giant Sloth is a nice finisher common. Is there a trample-granting effect in green? Have you considered what happens once people thrive it?
- White Cremate can totally be an instant (Purify the Grave. Besides, I don't think it can be used to answer Swarm at instant speed anyway). I would advise against Grave Purge as a name because, y'know... Gravepurge is a thing.
- I like the idea of Guild Truce, but it's traditionally seen as poor form to include an efficient card that nullifies (as opposed to being merely an answer) a significant portion of a set's theme in the set itself.
- I don't like the idea of white getting shadow abilities as on Guardian Lynx. I'd be fine if it was a 1/1 getting +0/+2 or some sort of trigger instead though.
- Noble Pegasus is a great example of simplicity. Love it.
- Pack Dromad might be a 2-life card, but it's one of those things that needs a lot of playtesting to be sure of.
- Sanctify just reinforces my dislike of Banish, plus I think it's a little undercosted as a hybrid (while that depends in part of what's in the set ench/art wise, I'm also trying to think of nonrotating formats).
- I'd keep Sky Patrol as is only if Cirrus Griffin shrinks significantly or loses flying.
- I belong to the "untargetted draw" clan myself, but otherwise I really like Sphinx’s Inspiration. Another epitome of simplicity. The card is not a problem, but I think you'll want to make sure you got a mono-u draw spell still. The common draw spells in Alara, ravnica and khans were mostly mono-U (the lone except is consult the necrosages, balanced by Flight of Fancy)
- Sunrise Ceremony is nowhere near a white common. Either returning nonland permanents in general (as opposed to enchantment or artifact/equipment) or doing so to the battlefield alone would push it out of common. PLUS it's redflagged for converted mana cost.
- I don't think I'll rehash my previous counters-related arguments Vel-Tyra Blessing.
Jun 11, 2017Wurmskin defense is literally the only card that could be argued against my point, and it predates NWO by a significant margin. In everything else putting counters on target creature is not the upfront effect (awaken primarily turns a spell into an ETB ability, modular is a death trigger, Hunger is not even from a standard-legal set and still not the base effect anyway, and cards that puts counters on themselves are completely irrelevant to my argument)Posted in: Custom Card Creation
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Aug 27, 2017I thought Daxos was a champion (or was it oracle?) of all gods? Or did I misremember that?Posted in: Articles
There's a lot of link issues, especially, for some reason, in the Zendikar section. I'm not sure why several links seem to be intended for story articles only in that section, so for those I listed both the story and fixed card link.
- You got Elspeth's family name misspelled in the Scars sction.
- It's Narset Transcendent.
- "Nissa's Quest" (if meant as a card) should be Nissa's Renewal (the card in that article is Nissa's Expedition, but I'm not sure it or the story link are appropriate)
- "Slaughter at the Refuge" (if meant as a card) should be Gruesome Slaughter
- "Revelation at the eye" should be Hedron Archive or Ugin's Insight
- The Aligned Hedron Network link has a typo in it.
- Ob Nixilis Reignited doesn't have a comma in it.
- There's some weird issue with the apostrophes in Tamiyo's Journal and Inventors' Fair
- I think Baral, Chief of Compliance ought to be linked.
- Hazoret's full name is Hazoret the Fervent
- Razaketh's is Razaketh, the Foulblooded (mind the comma)
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