Vitka, Cateran Overseer3BB
Legendary Creature – Human Advisor (M)
Whenever you cast an Assassin, Mercenary, or Rogue spell, if Vitka, Cateran Overseer is in the command zone, you may put a bounty counter on target creature. For as long as a creature has a bounty counter on it, it has "When this creature dies, each opponent draws a card and gains 2 life."
When Vitka enters the battlefield, destroy each creature with a bounty counter on it. 3/3
As you can see, it's a bit wordy. Also seems very similar to Mathas, Fiend Seeker - I'm assuming this is the inspiration, and not just a coincidence?
Regardless, WotC gets to cheat a bit by shrinking their text, while most online card makers don't do that. So, probably fine.
As far as balance, I think it would be okay.
I think the first ability would be better as an eminence effect, and then the second ability could be "Whenever you cast an Assassin, Mercenary, or Rogue spell, destroy target creature".
Yep definitely getting the bounty counter ability from Mathas. It's great flavor for bounties, mercs, and so on. The wording can't be less than what is as far as I've tried. (Vitka has less characters than Arahbo and Inalla.) And I even shortened Mathas just a bit by making it a may on any creature.
This card started out with Eminence but then I realized that Eminence is a tribal thing (Albeit not necessarily stuck there) and I want to affect three different classes. The legend itself doesn't have to be an Advisor but I feel it fits okay without other suggestions someone may have.
The balance seems good here for Commander. Sticks you in one color, Commander damage isn't an option, the decklist is restricted, the ability gives bonuses to opponents in multiplayer, and Tetzimoc is a good indicator that Vitka is fine at cost.
Any help on using less text is highly desired.
EDIT: Something I could do is drop the ETB alotogether and give her something assassin-y. Deathtouch and first strike or something else. Would save some room and her ETB doesn't greatly effect the card's intended purpose; recruit your enemies and profit
looking at some other cards, it's fine text-wise. I think it's just a case of real cards having better formatting than whatever card creator you used. I don't see a way to cut down on text without changing functionality.
Legendary Creature – Human Advisor (M)
Whenever you cast an Assassin, Mercenary, or Rogue spell, if Vitka, Cateran Overseer is in the command zone, you may put a bounty counter on target creature. For as long as a creature has a bounty counter on it, it has "When this creature dies, each opponent draws a card and gains 2 life."
When Vitka enters the battlefield, destroy each creature with a bounty counter on it.
3/3
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Regardless, WotC gets to cheat a bit by shrinking their text, while most online card makers don't do that. So, probably fine.
As far as balance, I think it would be okay.
I think the first ability would be better as an eminence effect, and then the second ability could be "Whenever you cast an Assassin, Mercenary, or Rogue spell, destroy target creature".
But that might get even more wordy.
- Rabid Wombat
This card started out with Eminence but then I realized that Eminence is a tribal thing (Albeit not necessarily stuck there) and I want to affect three different classes. The legend itself doesn't have to be an Advisor but I feel it fits okay without other suggestions someone may have.
The balance seems good here for Commander. Sticks you in one color, Commander damage isn't an option, the decklist is restricted, the ability gives bonuses to opponents in multiplayer, and Tetzimoc is a good indicator that Vitka is fine at cost.
Any help on using less text is highly desired.
EDIT: Something I could do is drop the ETB alotogether and give her something assassin-y. Deathtouch and first strike or something else. Would save some room and her ETB doesn't greatly effect the card's intended purpose; recruit your enemies and profit
- Rabid Wombat