MTG Salvation

So this is my poetry thread so I can just write stuff when I feel like it. Comments are very much appreciated....


Say no more
Words that fall on false ears
Attempt to make a change
In a stone brain
Crack it, crack it
Hold the chisel steady
Hammer, hammer
Watch the blood trickle
Fingernails don't matter
Change her world
What matters to you
Don't let go
Break your grip
The chisel falls
Sweat and blood mixed
forming a pool on the ground
Take your blinder
Shove, shove
Make it fit
She will think like you
Chisel, Chisel
Reverie in the noise
Steel against stone
No more, no more
Until you are done
I will bite your heels
nip and bark, nip and bark
Make it fit, make it fit
Shove, shove
Turn it on yourself
Steel against skull
I will bite
Chisel, chisel
Lie on the floor
Your final bath
Blood and sweat
nip and bite, nip and bite
until I too lie still

Not the best thing ever, but hey, what can you do?

A father hits his kids,
then goes out to drink
and on the way home,
drunk as he wished,
he's killed by one of his own kind

At his funeral
do you know what they say?
They speak of how loving he was
The funny things he said
How hard he had it as a kid

The fact that his daughter drops out of school
His son becomes an alchoholic
These things are ignored
because everyone loves you
when you're dead

I don't see what you mean with the problem....I read it over and the grammar is fine....

I really like the second one, and I know what you mean by the entire context. A similar thing happened to a friend of mine. Also, I'd like to commend you and your truly awesome banner, they're IMHO the best band on the face of the planet.

Thank you for your comments.

And yeah, The Mars Volta are amazing....I love them sooooo much, as you can see since I made a banner of them, lol.

your dream
reality
and reality a dream
but neither matter
one wish, one hope
no long will you be alone
there is one
a touch
a whisper
trees bend
the hope
ripping, tearing
focus
the wind loves you
the trees love you
can you feel it?
something more
someone
in the wind
impossible
forget
remember
focus
the wind can't hold you
can't kiss you
can't make you better
this is you
no lie
one life
one chance
one memory
that could ruin it all
think of the wind
relish it
one last time
move on, move on
it's not real
the wind is nothing
realize this
and forget
what you thought you had