Koopa - Renin, Savior of Species: I don't see that strong of a connection to the inspiration card, really, and it isn't funny at all, which seriously hurts in an un-set challenge.
Cardz5000 - No show
Hemlock - McBallard, Who Keeps Coming Back for More: Interesting in how it plays with the inspiration card, but it is very busy in a way that isn't really funny or necessary feeling.
doomfish - Neera, Propelled Penguin: A penguin with a propeller is funny. One that summons tokens is one that I don't fully get flavor-wise, but it's a solid mechanic for an un-set built to take advantage of cards like it.
Subject16 - Mark Poole, Bachelor of Arts: This is the kind of reference I'd expect to see on an un-card, and it has mechanics that work well in un-sets.
Raptorchan - Boorse, Corpse Bomb: Don't really see the need for that keyword ability, since it seems very narrow. But a solid design generally.
Wouldn't Guardian of the Multiverse more applicable? I wish you had made a slight mechanical connection, but I guess there's a neat flavor here between the two. While terribly boring to look at design wise, this certainly looks like something commander players would drool over.
The only complaint I have is that the whole can't be blocked 2 power thing belongs to green and red. But I guess with blue being the king of unblockability that's a minor concern. I like this very much. The entire package. Flavor, gameplay, power. It all comes together. Neat.
Apparently not interesting enough.
In addition to funny, an unset card should actually be fun to play. Having to stand up to excuse yourself to the bathroom every turn isn't exactly fun. It just feels bad when you get too annoyed to keep this up. So I'd take this as a starting point for a concept. It's a nice griefer card. A bit too much maybe and people will start asking about what happens when they touch cards with other cards and whatnot. Problematic, but a fun concept.
I feel like a legendary horse deserves a name. Does humans becoming horses mean they are riding them now? That's not what happens usually. See: your random card. Other than that I like this. Not sure why it's Mythic though. It's a cool human tribal commander.
Make it mandatory. Also make it passive and all at once at the end of turn. You're going to tap them before your turn anyways. Then it's a cute lifegain card.
That first line made me laugh out loud. A Starfish. Pfft. Not sure what that last ability is going to be useful for (other than turning all Anteaters to Starfishes of course), but there's probably some fun behind that. And a pen and paper. Oof.
1. master_of_the_universe
2. void_nothing
3. Jimmy Groove
Private Mod Note
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Multiple instances of lifelink on the same creature are redundant.
Multiple instances of lifelink on the same creature are redundant.
Multiple instances of lifelink on the same creature are redundant.
—Eli Shiffrin, Rules Manager, on a design stacking lifelink instances
I just want to point out that Erch's ability is meant to change subtypes anywhere, like Goblin King can be made to give Triskelavites +1/+1 and mountainwalk. The primary use of this ability would obviously be on himself, but...
Koopa - The flavor is alright here; the design is not all that compelling. I like "customizable lords" but ultimately this just kinda feels like Hero of Goma Fada.
Hemlock - Pretty cool; definitely Un- but in the Unstable sort of way. The design is well over the curve and would be way too much in Limited, but altogether a fun idea and a spectacular parody of 80s action heroes.
doomfish - Boy, Neera is hard to evaluate, isn't she? While all draft-dependent cards are swingy by nature, this one might break the game if you happen to be drafting with Coldsnap/Battle for Zendikar/any set featuring an Ajani Avatar. Still, extremely clever.
Subject16 - One of the wildest designs from the simplest random card. I appreciate this design very much, and artist-matters is fun, but the flavor is a bit hard to parse (the surrealism of Mark Poole being a superhero is appropriate to Un-land, though).
Raptorchan - Lost battalion is brilliance, and this just seems like a strong and fun Un-legend through and through. No complaints.
There isn't much of a connection between Talon Sliver and Renin mechanically, which hurts. The flavor is pretty cool, with a guardian-style ability that we usually see on angels, but the design is ultimately a little underwhelming. Also not really that funny, which hurts in an Un-inspired challenge.
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McBallard's return clause works pretty well, and the idea of a creature that keeps coming back forever is pretty neat, but ultimately there's a little too much going on with this card. Five keywords on a three-drop feels cluttered. He does tie in with Martial Coup pretty well though.
The flavor for this card is adorable, not to mention perfect for Bablovia. The tie-in with Un-sets' (and especially Unstable's) focus on tokens is great, the Conspiracy-style "reveal as you draft" ability is great, and the token-producing ability is a neat spin on Propeller Pioneer's fabricate.
Now this is what an Un-card should be! Unhinged's art-matters cards (cf. Drawn Together) were some of the best cards in the set, and this is an amazing riff on that theme. The abilities work very well together, the Willing Test Subject-style p/t boost seems strong but not overpowered, and the artist gag is the cherry on top. (Side note: I would really like to see a fourth Un-set at some point that focuses on artists; perhaps a world where art comes to life and fights?)
The card ties in very well with Bomber Corps in both name and ability, which is always a plus. The idea behind lost battalion is great, if a little narrow, and the idea of Boorse exploding into fragments, then rebuilding himself, is pretty cool flavorfully. 4 damage on the ability might be a little too strong though.
Legend
It's not easy to see the connection between this and Planar Gate, also unfortunately can't see anything funny about this card. Heroic? Maybe...
master_of_the_universe
Can't say I am speechless, but definetely can't look at this card with a poker face. So you got my applause and it won't be easy to explain why do I have a million reasons to like this, I guess it just was born this way.
netn10
Everything about this card is too much, no matter how good flavorfully it is.
Jimmy Groove
I didn't quite get the humor here, mabe not being native English is a problem this time though it definetey here. But at least it seems balanced.
Zur the Enchanter
If anyone will say that lifegain sucks, he'll be choking on those words when it hits the table. To bad news: this is not very funny which is critical for this challenge.
void_nothing
I see what you did here, Batman. I think this can pass though this card is text-heavy but understandable.
1) master_of_the_universe
2) void_nothing
3) Jimmy Groove
Renin, Savior of Species4W
Legendary Creature - Human Hero (R)
As Renin enters the battlefield, choose a creature type.
Other creatures you control of the chosen type are indestructable. "All life is precious."
4/4
I like this card. It is very simple and printable. It is good in many decks and it does resembles your random card very well.
McBallard, who Keeps Coming Back for More1RW
Legendary Creature - Human Soldier Hero (m)
Haste, first strike, vigilance, prowess, menace.
Whenever you would create a soldier token, you may instead put McBallard, who Keeps Coming Back for More onto the battlefield from your graveyard or exile instead. "Aren't you dead yet!"
2/2
Thus card has some interesting mish-mash of abilities. I live the flavor of it but it might do too much.
Neera, Propelled Penguin2GW
Legendary Creature - Bird Artificer Hero (R) [Silver border and Crossbreed Labs watermark]
Reveal Neera, Propelled Penguin as you draft it and note a token you took from a booster pack you opened this draft.
Flying
When Neera, Propelled Penguin enters the battlefield, put a +1/+1 counter on it or create a token that you noted for cards named Neera, Propelled Penguin.
2/2
I love tokens, drafting and creative Un-designs. This card seems like a blast to draft with, and my only problem with it is that ability isn't good in commander - only in limited.
Mark Poole, Bachelor of Arts2WUB
Legendary Creature - Human Artist Hero (Mythic)
Spells with art by Mark Poole can't be countered. 2: Target spell or permanents color or artists becomes the color or artist of your choice until end of turn.
At the beginning of combat on your turn, roll a six-sided Dice for each permanent you control with art by Mark Poole. For each roll of 4 or higher, put a +1/+1 counter on Mark Poole,Bachelor of Arts. "Kev Walk'outta here."
-> Illustrator: Kev Walker Mark Poole (in that Kev Walker did the original art for but Mark Poole was then invited to alter it with a red sharpie.
2/2
This card is very flavorful and creative, and I love the flavor text! Would definitely make people want to build a Commander deck around it.
Boorse, Corpse Bomb2BR
Legendary Creature - Zombie Hero (R) R, Sacrifice Boorse, Corpse Bomb: Boorse, Corpse Bomb deals 4 damage to any target, then create three black and red 1/1 Zombie creature tokens named Boorse's Fragment. Lost Battalion — Whenever at least three creatures you control named Boorse's Fragment attack, if Boorse in your graveyard, sacrifice them and put Boorse from your graveyard to the battlefield tapped and attacking.
3/3
I love the flavor of this card, and it is has a subtle card adventage in it, overall - great package.
Zur the enchanter: Hitting a dual land as the random card is not a lucky wvwnt and I think you did very well for it. Althought it doesn't feel very heroic the ammount of life it can produce can be really, really huge and get you to victory with stuff like Felidar Sovereign
Voidnothing: I love the humour here. It mocks the random card, the super-sub-type system and a really funny flavor text. That said, the changing ability is impracticable given basic land types. One of the things I liked about Unstable is how they used it to try weird stuff, and thia is in that spirit.
Jimmy Groove: I like the flavor of this one a lot and fits well with your random card. The lord effect is neat and simple.
netn10: Washing your hands every turn is too of a hassle to make this viable, but the touching clause is just great. I imagine this leading to discussions on wether a card is touched or not and players finding creative ways of tapping and untapping stuff.
Master of the Universe: Awesomely well played on Lady Orca, this card is fun and works very well, keeping it in the vein of big blue creatures needing odd stuff getting done on their behalf. The evasion clause is a bit too green, tho.
Legend: Really ppowerful. Big toughness + flash + extremely powerful effect for 4 mana looks quite pushed, but it's not as we haven't seen pushed stuff being printed anyways. I think that the fact it doesn't protect itself give a bit of balance, It's a bit too serious for the spirit of the challenge tho.
1. Master of the universe
2. Jimmy Groove
3. Zur the enchanter.
Cardz5000 - No show
Hemlock - McBallard, Who Keeps Coming Back for More: Interesting in how it plays with the inspiration card, but it is very busy in a way that isn't really funny or necessary feeling.
doomfish - Neera, Propelled Penguin: A penguin with a propeller is funny. One that summons tokens is one that I don't fully get flavor-wise, but it's a solid mechanic for an un-set built to take advantage of cards like it.
Subject16 - Mark Poole, Bachelor of Arts: This is the kind of reference I'd expect to see on an un-card, and it has mechanics that work well in un-sets.
Raptorchan - Boorse, Corpse Bomb: Don't really see the need for that keyword ability, since it seems very narrow. But a solid design generally.
Top 3:
1. Subject16
2. doomfish
3. Raptorchan
1. master_of_the_universe
2. void_nothing
3. Jimmy Groove
Multiple instances of lifelink on the same creature are redundant.
Multiple instances of lifelink on the same creature are redundant.
—Eli Shiffrin, Rules Manager, on a design stacking lifelink instances
Hemlock - Pretty cool; definitely Un- but in the Unstable sort of way. The design is well over the curve and would be way too much in Limited, but altogether a fun idea and a spectacular parody of 80s action heroes.
doomfish - Boy, Neera is hard to evaluate, isn't she? While all draft-dependent cards are swingy by nature, this one might break the game if you happen to be drafting with Coldsnap/Battle for Zendikar/any set featuring an Ajani Avatar. Still, extremely clever.
Subject16 - One of the wildest designs from the simplest random card. I appreciate this design very much, and artist-matters is fun, but the flavor is a bit hard to parse (the surrealism of Mark Poole being a superhero is appropriate to Un-land, though).
Raptorchan - Lost battalion is brilliance, and this just seems like a strong and fun Un-legend through and through. No complaints.
2. Hemlock
3. Subject16
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2. doomfish
3. Raptorchan
It's not easy to see the connection between this and Planar Gate, also unfortunately can't see anything funny about this card. Heroic? Maybe...
master_of_the_universe
Can't say I am speechless, but definetely can't look at this card with a poker face. So you got my applause and it won't be easy to explain why do I have a million reasons to like this, I guess it just was born this way.
netn10
Everything about this card is too much, no matter how good flavorfully it is.
Jimmy Groove
I didn't quite get the humor here, mabe not being native English is a problem this time though it definetey here. But at least it seems balanced.
Zur the Enchanter
If anyone will say that lifegain sucks, he'll be choking on those words when it hits the table. To bad news: this is not very funny which is critical for this challenge.
void_nothing
I see what you did here, Batman. I think this can pass though this card is text-heavy but understandable.
2) void_nothing
3) Jimmy Groove
Thus card has some interesting mish-mash of abilities. I live the flavor of it but it might do too much.
I love tokens, drafting and creative Un-designs. This card seems like a blast to draft with, and my only problem with it is that ability isn't good in commander - only in limited.
This card is very flavorful and creative, and I love the flavor text! Would definitely make people want to build a Commander deck around it.
I love the flavor of this card, and it is has a subtle card adventage in it, overall - great package.
1st: Subject16
2nd: doomfish
3rd: Raptorchan
Cardz5000 - no submission. Too bad. I was looking forward to a hero based on squirrel nest.
Hemlock - Kudos for originality. Create-replacement effect is novel. Name is silly. He's quite overloaded with keywords.
Doomfish - great "conspiracy" design. One I'd enjoy drafting. I mostly draft and wish this sort of thing was normal in Magic.
Subject16 - very creative. this could/should be in the next unset.
Raptorchan - It's a tad cartoonish - like Fallen Empires orcs - but underneath the cutesyness is a solid fun design.
1st Hemlock
2nd Raptorchan
3rd Doomfish
Zur the enchanter: Hitting a dual land as the random card is not a lucky wvwnt and I think you did very well for it. Althought it doesn't feel very heroic the ammount of life it can produce can be really, really huge and get you to victory with stuff like Felidar Sovereign
Voidnothing: I love the humour here. It mocks the random card, the super-sub-type system and a really funny flavor text. That said, the changing ability is impracticable given basic land types. One of the things I liked about Unstable is how they used it to try weird stuff, and thia is in that spirit.
Jimmy Groove: I like the flavor of this one a lot and fits well with your random card. The lord effect is neat and simple.
netn10: Washing your hands every turn is too of a hassle to make this viable, but the touching clause is just great. I imagine this leading to discussions on wether a card is touched or not and players finding creative ways of tapping and untapping stuff.
Master of the Universe: Awesomely well played on Lady Orca, this card is fun and works very well, keeping it in the vein of big blue creatures needing odd stuff getting done on their behalf. The evasion clause is a bit too green, tho.
Legend: Really ppowerful. Big toughness + flash + extremely powerful effect for 4 mana looks quite pushed, but it's not as we haven't seen pushed stuff being printed anyways. I think that the fact it doesn't protect itself give a bit of balance, It's a bit too serious for the spirit of the challenge tho.
1. Master of the universe
2. Jimmy Groove
3. Zur the enchanter.