Lucia, SkygazerR
Legendary Creature - Human (R)
Fading 6
Remove a fading counter from Lucia: Lucia becomes a 2/2 with flying until end of turn.
1/1 "I would trade a day on earth for a minute among the stars." - Lucia
Helestra, Ruin of AkrosUR
Legendary Creature - Human (R)
Soulbond
When a creature paired with Helestra dies, draw a card.
1/2 "You are the light of my sky and I swear my life to you." - Anax
Beloved's BetrayalRWB
Sorcery (M)
Choose two target creatures an opponent controls. You gain control of one chosen at random. They gain protection from each other. Cymede didn't think she could ever bring herself to hurt him, but she knew he she could never stand by his side again.
Eternal NightmareUUBB
Enchantment - Aura (R)
Enchant Creature
At the beginning of each upkeep, tap enchanted creature.
Whenever enchanted creature becomes untapped, its controller loses life equal to enchanted creature's power. Feldon awoke to Loran's screams for months after he buried her.
Cruel Quandary1RB
Sorcery (M)
Separate each creature target opponent controls into two piles face down. That opponent sacrifices each creature in one pile. "Let's play a game!" - Tibalt
Beloved's Betrayal -- Permanent creature control in Black / Red isn't a thing. Control Magic abilities are in blue, and never on non permanents. If it gained control of it until end of turn, untapped it and gave it haste, then it would fit Red. Gaining protection tends to be White too, and is rarely used these days.
Eternal Nightmare -- I like this design, however the cost makes it unplayable in my humble opinion. If this was 1UB it would be much better.
Cruel Quandary -- This seems like a bomb. Face down piles is even better than Liliana of the Veil's ultimate. This probably needs to cost at least 2 mana more.
Eternal Nightmare could probably be costed lower but I think it's pretty powerful since it's not only a removal spell but a quick, evasive clock if cast on a big beater.
Cruel Quandary is a card that reads scary but is probably not that good. Imagine the typical board state in whatever constructed format you're playing. The opponent might have 2-3 guys and a lot of the time you fail to kill their best guy? It's definitely not comparable to Liliana's ultimate since this is creatures only. I think it could go to 4 mana though, but that would take it from a maindeckable card to sideboard material.
I just want to say that you did a great job infusing these cards with flavor. There are some color pie and costing issues, sure, but I very much want to emphasize that it's hard to get a card to tell a good story and you did a fantastic job of that, particularly with Beloved's Betrayal.
Beloved's Betrayal has unusual memory issues. It is, of course, very flavorful - I think there were attempts in Future Sight's design to make Auras with "enchant two creatures" or somesuch and this reminds me of that, along with a twisted version of soulbond. An orderly mutual breakup doesn't exactly feel like a particularly black OR red concept, except in a relatively narrow sense.
Eternal Nightmare is probably the strongest design here.
Cruel Quandary is... pushed... it amounts to forcing an opponent to sacrifice half their creatures rounded down at random or a better result than that, which is probably worth four mana. This would still be a Constructed card - a fringe one, mind - but at three mana I'd be more worried about the effects on Limited.
@Willows: Thanks! When I'm not making competitive minded cards, that's exactly what I'm going for. I don't think any of my cards will ever hit a table, but if I can make someone feel something (and I believe Magic cards are a valid medium for that) then that's what I aim to do.
@void_nothing: Hey man! I always appreciate your feedback.
Beloved's Betrayal: Well it's Red and Black for the flavour of emotion and selfishness. Maybe White should get in there though, as some togetherness does remain. Would RWB be good or too pushed?
Cruel Quandary: Yeah... I guess this one is a bit tough to evaluate since it's fairly contextual. I still think this can be worse than Murder a lot of the time but if you're a RB deck that gets into a lot of board stalls the upside is kind of insane. As for Limited (I guess I should start adding rarities), I think I would make this a Mythic since it's story piece and a weird effect, but I could see making this cost 4 at uncommon.
Lucia, SkygazerR
Legendary Creature - Human
Fading 6
Remove a fading counter from Lucia: Lucia becomes a 2/2 with flying until end of turn.
1/1 "I would trade a day on earth for a minute among the stars." - Lucia
Helestra, Ruin of AkrosUR
Legendary Creature - Human
Soulbond
When a creature paired with Helestra dies, draw a card.
1/2 "You are the light of my sky and I swear my life to you." - Anax
Legendary Creature - Human (R)
Fading 6
Remove a fading counter from Lucia: Lucia becomes a 2/2 with flying until end of turn.
1/1
"I would trade a day on earth for a minute among the stars." - Lucia
Helestra, Ruin of Akros UR
Legendary Creature - Human (R)
Soulbond
When a creature paired with Helestra dies, draw a card.
1/2
"You are the light of my sky and I swear my life to you." - Anax
Beloved's Betrayal RWB
Sorcery (M)
Choose two target creatures an opponent controls. You gain control of one chosen at random. They gain protection from each other.
Cymede didn't think she could ever bring herself to hurt him, but she knew he she could never stand by his side again.
Eternal Nightmare UUBB
Enchantment - Aura (R)
Enchant Creature
At the beginning of each upkeep, tap enchanted creature.
Whenever enchanted creature becomes untapped, its controller loses life equal to enchanted creature's power.
Feldon awoke to Loran's screams for months after he buried her.
Cruel Quandary 1RB
Sorcery (M)
Separate each creature target opponent controls into two piles face down. That opponent sacrifices each creature in one pile.
"Let's play a game!" - Tibalt
Eternal Nightmare -- I like this design, however the cost makes it unplayable in my humble opinion. If this was 1UB it would be much better.
Cruel Quandary -- This seems like a bomb. Face down piles is even better than Liliana of the Veil's ultimate. This probably needs to cost at least 2 mana more.
Servien
Chaos' Realm
Escalation of Chaos
Tales of Cahdaria
Enigmatic Distrubance
Celestial Unveiling
Eternal Nightmare could probably be costed lower but I think it's pretty powerful since it's not only a removal spell but a quick, evasive clock if cast on a big beater.
Cruel Quandary is a card that reads scary but is probably not that good. Imagine the typical board state in whatever constructed format you're playing. The opponent might have 2-3 guys and a lot of the time you fail to kill their best guy? It's definitely not comparable to Liliana's ultimate since this is creatures only. I think it could go to 4 mana though, but that would take it from a maindeckable card to sideboard material.
Eternal Nightmare is probably the strongest design here.
Cruel Quandary is... pushed... it amounts to forcing an opponent to sacrifice half their creatures rounded down at random or a better result than that, which is probably worth four mana. This would still be a Constructed card - a fringe one, mind - but at three mana I'd be more worried about the effects on Limited.
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@void_nothing: Hey man! I always appreciate your feedback.
Beloved's Betrayal: Well it's Red and Black for the flavour of emotion and selfishness. Maybe White should get in there though, as some togetherness does remain. Would RWB be good or too pushed?
Cruel Quandary: Yeah... I guess this one is a bit tough to evaluate since it's fairly contextual. I still think this can be worse than Murder a lot of the time but if you're a RB deck that gets into a lot of board stalls the upside is kind of insane. As for Limited (I guess I should start adding rarities), I think I would make this a Mythic since it's story piece and a weird effect, but I could see making this cost 4 at uncommon.
Lucia, Skygazer R
Legendary Creature - Human
Fading 6
Remove a fading counter from Lucia: Lucia becomes a 2/2 with flying until end of turn.
1/1
"I would trade a day on earth for a minute among the stars." - Lucia
Helestra, Ruin of Akros UR
Legendary Creature - Human
Soulbond
When a creature paired with Helestra dies, draw a card.
1/2
"You are the light of my sky and I swear my life to you." - Anax
Helestra should draw a card should she die too.
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