Hey, I haven't done much posting on here but I just finished the first draft of a little project and thought I'd throw it up here for some feed back. I have a commander cube and I didn't know what to do if people failed to draft a general that would work for their deck (I did do drafts with "general packs" but I wanted to mix them in to better simulate an actual draft).
Anyway, I came up with the idea to create some "Draft Fail" generals. These would be one of each color combo and would be something that would hurt you a little for not drafting a general for your deck but not so much that it wouldn't be fun to play with, and maybe even find a way to put to good use in some cases.
Mainly I want feedback on if they feel like they fit color wise for the most part. If I got the rules and wording right. If any of theme feel to mean, or not mean enough. And just any other general feedback people want to give. Just let me know what you think. There are renders with links to the art in the spoilers under each text version (I personally can't grok cards without the image). Anyway, thanks for taking a look.
All the text files are in this spoiler below, to save on space. Sorry there are a lot of cards, just figured I'd post them all at once. Feel free to just look at the color combos that seem interesting to you.
Ely, "Come at me" Sabra1WWUU
Legendary Creature — Wizard Brager (M)
If Ely starts the game in the command zone each opponent may search his or her library for a card. Shuffle each of those libraries then put the card on top of it before he or she draws a card on their first turn.
Players who mulligan can’t search their library this way.
7/7
Haus, "Draw Cards!" JonesUB
Legendary Creature — Human Accountant (M)
Hexproof
As long as Haus is in your command zone you can’t cast other creature spells.
When Haus enters the battlefield, draw a card.
1/1
Krix, Imp of Pain1BR
Legendary Creature — Imp Beast (M)
If Krix is your commander, it starts the game on the battlefield under your control.
At the beginning of your upkeep put a +1/+1 counter on Krix then it deals two damage to you for each counter on it.
3: Gain control of Krix and loose 1 life for each counter on it. Any player may activate this ability except during combat.
0/1
Fred, the Fiesty SatyrRG
Legendary Creature — Goat Satyr (M)
Haste
When Fred enters the battlefield he fights the creature with the highest power on the battlefield.
You can’t cast Fred during your first, or second turns of the game.
If Fred started the game in the command zone you cannot win the game if Fred hasn’t dealt damage to each opponent.
4/3
Cindy, Wife of D. HermitGW
Legendary Creature — Crazy Druid (M)
As long as Cindy, Wife of D. Hermit is in the command zone at the start of the game, each of your opponents starts the game with a 1/1 green and white squirrel token on the battlefield.
When Cindy dies, each player may populate.
2/2
Bob, Lightning Growler2UR
Legendary Creature — Bear Wizard (M)
Hexproof
At the beginning of your upkeep, if Bob is in the command zone, she deals 3 damage to a creature or player chosen at random. If an opponent or an opponents creature is chosen this way choose a random creature or player a second time instead.
6/3
Fera, Incompetent NecromageBG
Legendary Creature — Elf Wizard (M)
Deathtouch
At the end of each opponents turn, if Fera is in the command zone, he or she may return a creature or a land from his or her graveyard to the battlefield. She’s bad at this.
2/4
Fib, the Over ZeliousRRWW
Legendary Creature — Goblin Fanatic (M)
Lifelink
As long as Fib is in your command zone creatures you control can’t activate abilities with T in their cost, have haste and must attack each turn if able, and can’t attack players who don’t control creatures.
5/5
V. Fu, Daughter of Dr. MoreauGU
Legendary Creature — Human Wizard (M)
As long as V. Fu is in the command zone at the end of your turn put three blue green creature tokens onto the battlefield under your control that are a 1/1 Elk Frog, a 3/3 Dog Bird with flying, and a 5/5 Ox Crab with trample. Each of the tokens has “at end of turn a player chosen at random gains control of this creature.”
2/2
The Big’un5RGW
Legendary Creature — Monster Beast (M)
If The Big’un is in the command zone or on the battlefield, and another creature with power 6 or greater enters the battlefield, that creature gains Haste, Trample, and First Strike until end of turn.
10/7
Ed, Who Shoots then LooksRWU
Legendary Creature — Crazy Wizard (M)
2: Choose a player at random. That player either draws 2 cards, gains 3 life, or takes 4 damage chosen at random. Any player may activate this ability from any zone other than the library. Did I get’um?
4/4
Fillbip, Snails BaneGWU
Legendary Creature — Squirrel Fungus (M)
At the end of your turn if Fillbip is in the command zone, and you didn’t cast a spell this turn, each opponent may reveal his or her hand and cast any spells with the lowest converted mana cost of spells in his or her hand without paying their mana cost. He preys on the slow.
2/6
Oreo, Oloro’s Smaller BrotherWUB
Legendary Creature — Pigmy Giant (M)
At the beginning of your upkeep, Each opponent gains 1 life.
Whenever any player gains life, he or she may pay 5. If he or she does he or she may draw a card.
At the beginning of your upkeep, if Oreo is in the command zone, Each opponent gains 3 life.
3/4
The Paco7UUUBRRRRR
Legendary Creature — Paco Beast (M)
At the beginning of your upkeep if The Paco is in your graveyard or command zone, and there are 13 lands on the battlefield, put The Paco onto the battlefield under target players control chosen at random. No one summons the Paco!
7/4
Po, the Army Infector3BGW
Legendary Creature — Slime Beast (M)
Trample
If Po is in your command zone at the start of the game you gain, “if you take 14 damage from any one commander you lose the game.”
Creatures your opponents control have Lifelink.
7/8
She-La, the Giving Queen3GUB
Legendary Creature (M)
If She-La is in your command zone at the start of the game you gain, “Whenever you play a land any player may put a land from their hand onto the battlefield, when you cast an instant target player draws a card, and when you loose life target opponent gains that much life.”
7/7
Sinner Triplets2BRG
Legendary Creature — Angel Demon Other (M)
If Sinner Triplets is your commander it starts the game on the battlefield under your control.
At the beginning of each of your opponents upkeeps he or she gains “you may play cards from Sinner Triplets owners hand this turn.”
When a player plays a card from your hand, you may draw a card.
3/9
Surrak, Bear Puncher1URG
Legendary Creature — Human Puncher (M)
If Surrak is on the battlefield or in the command zone and a creature with power 4 or less enters the battlefield, under your control, Surrak deals 2 damage to it.
As long as Surrak is on the battlefield or in the command zone, creature spells your opponents cast can’t be countered.
6/6
Trip, Tounge GrabberWBR
Legendary Creature — Human Wrangler (M)
Vigilance, First Strike
As long as Trip, Tongue Grabber is in the command zone or graveyard creatures your opponents control have Haste, Vigilance, and First Strike. I sure ain’t no cat.
4/2
Carlston, the Pesky Ghost(W/B)
Legendary Creature — Pesky Spirit (M)
Fear
As long as Carlston is in your graveyard or command zone, and the mana in your mana pool could cast Carlston, you can’t cast other spells.
You can’t win the game and your opponents can’t lose the game.
3/2
20 cards made me kind of hesitant to comment, so I'll do it in five card chunks.
In the spirit of DTK I'll start with the allied pairs.
Ely seems pretty poor for whoever pilots her, but that makes sense for a fallback option. She should lead to fun gameplay though. Just to be clear, they search after they draw their opener, right?
Haus seems pretty good in a creatureless control deck, which is problematic. It means that for certain UB decks he will actually be your preferred commander, meaning you are relatively disincentivized to spend a pick on the UB commanders actually in the cube. He does feel fairly Dimir though, so perhaps just move him to 1UB?
If my opponent is piloting Krix, I can just wait 6 turns for him to kill himself. Is the bottom ablity supposed to let you give it away?
Fred seems interesting, RG, and weaker than other RG legendaries.
I think cindy is excellent, although it's hard to tell exactly how she would play. I suppose she would feel pretty bad if you drafted a Selesnya deck with no tokens and need a fallback Commander though.
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I primarily play limited, so most of my spoiler season comments view cards through that lens.
Anyway, I came up with the idea to create some "Draft Fail" generals. These would be one of each color combo and would be something that would hurt you a little for not drafting a general for your deck but not so much that it wouldn't be fun to play with, and maybe even find a way to put to good use in some cases.
Mainly I want feedback on if they feel like they fit color wise for the most part. If I got the rules and wording right. If any of theme feel to mean, or not mean enough. And just any other general feedback people want to give. Just let me know what you think. There are renders with links to the art in the spoilers under each text version (I personally can't grok cards without the image). Anyway, thanks for taking a look.
All the text files are in this spoiler below, to save on space. Sorry there are a lot of cards, just figured I'd post them all at once. Feel free to just look at the color combos that seem interesting to you.
Ely, "Come at me" Sabra 1WWUU
Legendary Creature — Wizard Brager (M)
If Ely starts the game in the command zone each opponent may search his or her library for a card. Shuffle each of those libraries then put the card on top of it before he or she draws a card on their first turn.
Players who mulligan can’t search their library this way.
7/7
http://doodledy.deviantart.com/art/Siren-59783055
Haus, "Draw Cards!" Jones UB
Legendary Creature — Human Accountant (M)
Hexproof
As long as Haus is in your command zone you can’t cast other creature spells.
When Haus enters the battlefield, draw a card.
1/1
http://www.wallpaperhi.com/thumbnails/detail/20111130/1--22-.jpg
Krix, Imp of Pain 1BR
Legendary Creature — Imp Beast (M)
If Krix is your commander, it starts the game on the battlefield under your control.
At the beginning of your upkeep put a +1/+1 counter on Krix then it deals two damage to you for each counter on it.
3: Gain control of Krix and loose 1 life for each counter on it. Any player may activate this ability except during combat.
0/1
https://lanternhollow.files.wordpress.com/2011/04/little_demon.jpg (all image searches turn up uncredited wallpaper sites)
Fred, the Fiesty Satyr RG
Legendary Creature — Goat Satyr (M)
Haste
When Fred enters the battlefield he fights the creature with the highest power on the battlefield.
You can’t cast Fred during your first, or second turns of the game.
If Fred started the game in the command zone you cannot win the game if Fred hasn’t dealt damage to each opponent.
4/3
http://www.artscroll.ru/page.php?al=Nazvanie_kartiny_neizvestno_000002_283944_kartina
Cindy, Wife of D. Hermit GW
Legendary Creature — Crazy Druid (M)
As long as Cindy, Wife of D. Hermit is in the command zone at the start of the game, each of your opponents starts the game with a 1/1 green and white squirrel token on the battlefield.
When Cindy dies, each player may populate.
2/2
http://cs7056.vk.me/c540102/v540102259/1eb0d/nxE0IhKhInA.jpg (couldn’t find artist, all sites in russian)
Bob, Lightning Growler 2UR
Legendary Creature — Bear Wizard (M)
Hexproof
At the beginning of your upkeep, if Bob is in the command zone, she deals 3 damage to a creature or player chosen at random. If an opponent or an opponents creature is chosen this way choose a random creature or player a second time instead.
6/3
http://media-copper.cursecdn.com/attachments/28/639/volibear_originalskin.jpg
Fera, Incompetent Necromage BG
Legendary Creature — Elf Wizard (M)
Deathtouch
At the end of each opponents turn, if Fera is in the command zone, he or she may return a creature or a land from his or her graveyard to the battlefield.
She’s bad at this.
2/4
https://s-media-cache-ak0.pinimg.com/736x/b7/12/4c/b7124c52ecb991746c567fe472d89538.jpg
Fib, the Over Zelious RRWW
Legendary Creature — Goblin Fanatic (M)
Lifelink
As long as Fib is in your command zone creatures you control can’t activate abilities with T in their cost, have haste and must attack each turn if able, and can’t attack players who don’t control creatures.
5/5
http://fc07.deviantart.net/fs70/f/2013/180/7/2/another_golbin_by_0bo-d6b5qtc.jpg
V. Fu, Daughter of Dr. Moreau GU
Legendary Creature — Human Wizard (M)
As long as V. Fu is in the command zone at the end of your turn put three blue green creature tokens onto the battlefield under your control that are a 1/1 Elk Frog, a 3/3 Dog Bird with flying, and a 5/5 Ox Crab with trample. Each of the tokens has “at end of turn a player chosen at random gains control of this creature.”
2/2
http://s452.photobucket.com/user/tynd_real/media/Fantasia/tumblr_m2jk26veII1rty7tao1_400.jpg.html
The Big’un 5RGW
Legendary Creature — Monster Beast (M)
If The Big’un is in the command zone or on the battlefield, and another creature with power 6 or greater enters the battlefield, that creature gains Haste, Trample, and First Strike until end of turn.
10/7
http://designspartan.com/wp-content/uploads/2012/08/pres_velinov36.jpg
Ed, Who Shoots then Looks RWU
Legendary Creature — Crazy Wizard (M)
2: Choose a player at random. That player either draws 2 cards, gains 3 life, or takes 4 damage chosen at random. Any player may activate this ability from any zone other than the library.
Did I get’um?
4/4
http://whatanart.com/2012/05/02/сleric-fantasy-illustration-yury-voronov-aka-merlin/
Fillbip, Snails Bane GWU
Legendary Creature — Squirrel Fungus (M)
At the end of your turn if Fillbip is in the command zone, and you didn’t cast a spell this turn, each opponent may reveal his or her hand and cast any spells with the lowest converted mana cost of spells in his or her hand without paying their mana cost.
He preys on the slow.
2/6
http://www.google.com/imgres?imgurl=http://wallpaperswa.com/thumbnails/detail/20120329/fantasy%2520art%2520snails%2520creatures%2520the%2520smurfs%25201920x1080%2520wallpaper_www.wallpaperhi.com_39.jpg&imgrefurl=http://wallpaperswa.com/Abstract/Fantasy/cityscapes_fantasy_art_science_fiction_artwork_machinery_of_the_stars_jaded_son_1920x1200_wallpap_6277&h=337&w=600&tbnid=AN1U8BjJTGIBhM:&zoom=1&docid=yF-i2bT0jx5QbM&ei=nH3-VPrVGNfsoATl_oL4Cw&tbm=isch&ved=0CD4QMygaMBo
Oreo, Oloro’s Smaller Brother WUB
Legendary Creature — Pigmy Giant (M)
At the beginning of your upkeep, Each opponent gains 1 life.
Whenever any player gains life, he or she may pay 5. If he or she does he or she may draw a card.
At the beginning of your upkeep, if Oreo is in the command zone, Each opponent gains 3 life.
3/4
http://4.bp.blogspot.com/-dMcuySJ_JO4/UiSgMMrgkuI/AAAAAAAAFCE/yQEP6M1Qggs/s1600/goblin.jpg
The Paco 7UUUBRRRRR
Legendary Creature — Paco Beast (M)
At the beginning of your upkeep if The Paco is in your graveyard or command zone, and there are 13 lands on the battlefield, put The Paco onto the battlefield under target players control chosen at random.
No one summons the Paco!
7/4
http://3.bp.blogspot.com/-WYD7TXwwQvw/Tj4Fyojgx6I/AAAAAAAABN0/J69CPrghlaw/s640/395_stream.jpg
Po, the Army Infector 3BGW
Legendary Creature — Slime Beast (M)
Trample
If Po is in your command zone at the start of the game you gain, “if you take 14 damage from any one commander you lose the game.”
Creatures your opponents control have Lifelink.
7/8
https://www.artstation.com/artwork/swamp-monster-18b7a137-5572-4387-a0e4-b29af06bbde7
She-La, the Giving Queen 3GUB
Legendary Creature (M)
If She-La is in your command zone at the start of the game you gain, “Whenever you play a land any player may put a land from their hand onto the battlefield, when you cast an instant target player draws a card, and when you loose life target opponent gains that much life.”
7/7
https://www.artstation.com/artwork/bug-queen
Sinner Triplets 2BRG
Legendary Creature — Angel Demon Other (M)
If Sinner Triplets is your commander it starts the game on the battlefield under your control.
At the beginning of each of your opponents upkeeps he or she gains “you may play cards from Sinner Triplets owners hand this turn.”
When a player plays a card from your hand, you may draw a card.
3/9
http://coolvibe.com/wp-content/uploads/2011/10/Fantasy-Art-Helen-Rusovich-Flame-Vortex.jpg
Surrak, Bear Puncher 1URG
Legendary Creature — Human Puncher (M)
If Surrak is on the battlefield or in the command zone and a creature with power 4 or less enters the battlefield, under your control, Surrak deals 2 damage to it.
As long as Surrak is on the battlefield or in the command zone, creature spells your opponents cast can’t be countered.
6/6
http://www.artofmtg.com/wp-content/uploads/2014/07/Khans-of-Tarkir-Art.jpg
Trip, Tounge Grabber WBR
Legendary Creature — Human Wrangler (M)
Vigilance, First Strike
As long as Trip, Tongue Grabber is in the command zone or graveyard creatures your opponents control have Haste, Vigilance, and First Strike.
I sure ain’t no cat.
4/2
http://www.phombo.com/art-photography/hq-wallpapers-collection-fantasy-art/557712/full/popular/
Carlston, the Pesky Ghost (W/B)
Legendary Creature — Pesky Spirit (M)
Fear
As long as Carlston is in your graveyard or command zone, and the mana in your mana pool could cast Carlston, you can’t cast other spells.
You can’t win the game and your opponents can’t lose the game.
3/2
http://static.betazeta.com/www.niubie.com/up/2011/07/gengar___commission_by_soupandbutter-d3jtlrm.jpg
In the spirit of DTK I'll start with the allied pairs.
Ely seems pretty poor for whoever pilots her, but that makes sense for a fallback option. She should lead to fun gameplay though. Just to be clear, they search after they draw their opener, right?
Haus seems pretty good in a creatureless control deck, which is problematic. It means that for certain UB decks he will actually be your preferred commander, meaning you are relatively disincentivized to spend a pick on the UB commanders actually in the cube. He does feel fairly Dimir though, so perhaps just move him to 1UB?
If my opponent is piloting Krix, I can just wait 6 turns for him to kill himself. Is the bottom ablity supposed to let you give it away?
Fred seems interesting, RG, and weaker than other RG legendaries.
I think cindy is excellent, although it's hard to tell exactly how she would play. I suppose she would feel pretty bad if you drafted a Selesnya deck with no tokens and need a fallback Commander though.
Interested in Custom Card Creation.
My Cube:Cardinal Custom Cube
A custom version of a third modern masters: MM2019
(filter->rarity to see in set rarity).