[Haiku Contest #4] Bonehoard (Playset)!

  • #1
    Hello everyone! Here is the new Haiku Contest. Sorry about the delay getting this started. I have two reasons. One is very obvious. The giant earthquake! I am fine and everyone I know is fine but northern Japan has it pretty rough. The second reason is that I couldn't find a foil Japanese Bonehoard! I couldn't find one in person at stores and my friends didn't have one. I usually order the cards through online auctions and there weren't even any there!

    As a result, we are going to do things a little differently this time. I gathered 4 non-foil Bonehoards and I will be giving away the the playset to the winner. I thought about giving out 1 each to four winners but I figured that isn't the best prize. But I realize that most people who are going to play Bonehoards are going to use 1 or two and tutor them, but still. A playset is a good prize, is it not?


    I am aware that I still haven't done a green card to complete the color cycle, but I wanted to do an artifact because of Mirrodin being an artifact block. My favorite of the new artifacts was of course, Bonehoard. He is so freaking cute!



    So this works the same way as last time. Please post your Bonehoard themed Haiku or Renga here. Because of the colorless nature of artifact cards and the black leaning of Phyrexian cards you can feel free to incorporate that as you see fit. You don't even necessarily have to write about Bonehoard and instead you can do Living Weapon or Phyrexian invasion themed Haiku too.

    I will run the contest, as usual, for about one month, ending April 17th, 2011.

    As with the last contest, you may enter as many times as you wish.

    Enjoy and good luck!

    (Blogger Version of the contest for non-forum entry is --Link Pending-- or feel free to response on twitter here)

    Edit:

    One more thing! Without the spoiler season going on and my signature being seen it is harder for me to spread the word for this contest. If you can, it would be greatly appreciated if you can spread the word on facebook on twitter. Thank you in advance!
    Last edited by ThisSatori: 3/16/2011 8:04:53 AM
  • #2
    I'll give it a shot


    In death there is strength
    Gathering bones of the passed
    In me they are One

    edit: another


    The marrow still fresh
    Inspiring desire for more
    Compleation is near
    Last edited by Vermy: 3/29/2011 10:04:15 AM
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  • #3
    crush of bone and spine
    life and death both intertwine
    now the end is near

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  • #4
    I got a Haiku from HelpMeHelpYou from another location that I wanted to consolidate here. His entry is:

    clear the field of bone
    a germs work is never done
    build my suit of death
  • #5
    Sentience was here
    Now there is life, nothing more
    It became compleat
    Last edited by weise guy: 3/16/2011 11:16:35 PM
  • #6
    Many men lay here
    Strewn across the battlefield
    Combine to make one

    What was imperfect
    We took from the foe
    Now serves Phyrexia
    Modern:
    Affinity

    Legacy:
    RUG Delver
  • #7
    With such great engines,
    the souls of men are shattered.
    Endless toil waits.
    my mouth is full of lies -
    and eyes are full of death besides
    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=OCqzd-gYJXE
  • #8
    I was born for this
    Shaped from a knot of corpses
    I am life in death



    Glad to hear you're doing well ThisSatori! I was actually thinking of you the other day watching the news, but forgot to mention it when I last PM'd you. I wish all the best to the people affected by this disaster and my thoughts are with those brave men and women still at the reactor as well. Let's all hope their sacrifice is not in vain and the meltdown is averted.

    On another note, I also just wrote a limerick that popped into my head (does it count as a limerick if it's not funny?). I assume I was subconsciously inspired by HelpMeHelpYou's haiku since my first line is in his poem. Hopefully no one thinks I'm contaminating this thread by bringing non-haiku's here, but just in case, I'll spoiler it.
    A germ’s work is never done
    Collecting bones under every sun
    Around me, strife
    But in me, life
    In the end, all will be one

    Sam111111, I don't think I get your poem. Are you saying that Phyrexia has "such great engines" capable of shattering the Mirrans? Is the bonehoard just waiting for the Mirrans to fall so it can endlessly toil?
  • #9
    Quote from Stardust
    Sam111111, I don't think I get your poem. Are you saying that Phyrexia has "such great engines" capable of shattering the Mirrans? Is the bonehoard just waiting for the Mirrans to fall so it can endlessly toil?

    Spoilers for all interpretation, of course.

    First off, the edit and quote buttons are way too close to each other. [shiver.]
    Secondly, it's not about Mirrans and Phyrexians. It's about a hoard of bones, or the picture on Bonehoard, which looked to me like a massive spider thresher going through stacks of bones. I used a little imagination to think of the souls that Bonehoard takes advantage of, and how they work before Bonehoard harvests them: Bonehoard being a great engine, but more thematically that the engine of life is great(read: massive) and people are sucked in and spit out against their will. The Bonehoard grows, as well, as more are sucked into the graveyard to become its fodder. In the Magic context 'men' is a bit disingenuous, but 'sentient creatures' is a bit of a mouthful, especially for a haiku. :p

    The 'souls of men are shattered' refers to what I see the drawing of bonehoard [at least] as, which is a consumptive thing that uses the bones for fuel. This may be too large of a leap, but alas.
    my mouth is full of lies -
    and eyes are full of death besides
    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=OCqzd-gYJXE
  • #10
    equipping it for two and swinging - whoops
    surprise, surprise
    the opponent scoops.

    special thanks to sentimentgx4 for the sig

    Pourquoi?
  • #11
    Quote from Stardust


    Glad to hear you're doing well ThisSatori! I was actually thinking of you the other day watching the news, but forgot to mention it when I last PM'd you. I wish all the best to the people affected by this disaster and my thoughts are with those brave men and women still at the reactor as well. Let's all hope their sacrifice is not in vain and the meltdown is averted.


    Hello! Thanks for worrying about me but I am fine. I am far enough away to have been safe!
  • #12
    U

    0.

    "食べ終えて 気付けば溜まる 骨の群れ"
    Somebody eats chicken.

    1.

    ”墓場から 戻ってきたら 皮が無い”
    Skinrender? probably.

    2.

    "気付いたか? 僕らは既に 死んでいる"
    We are already dead. huh, huh, huh!


    I'm writing in Japanese.
    I'll make English version, if I have enough time for thinking.
    This is a nice thread.
  • #13
    Gathering the dead
    rekindled into greatness
    the cycle renews
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  • #14
    I was given permission to translate those into English!

    Here they are! The meaning that is, the translations lose the 5-7-5 in English.

    Quote from mumu


    0.

    "食べ終えて 気付けば溜まる 骨の群れ"


    0
    After finishing eating,
    I noticed the gathering
    hoard of bones

    Quote from mumu

    1.

    ”墓場から 戻ってきたら 皮が無い”
    Skinrender? probably.


    After coming back
    From the graveyard
    I've no more skin

    Quote from mumu

    2.

    "気付いたか? 僕らは既に 死んでいる"
    We are already dead. huh, huh, huh!

    Have you noticed it?
    We are already
    Dead


    Great stuff Mumu! Thanks for joining MTGSalvation for the contest!
  • #15
    My attempt:

    Metal Mortivore,
    Chicken Exoskeleton,
    Stephen King's the Mist.

    Figure I'll go with 2 poems:

    Frankenstein's Monster,
    Stripped of Flesh, Sinew, Muscle,
    Like Paris Hilton.
    Last edited by GenghisTron: 3/20/2011 11:51:32 AM
  • #16
    Hey! Look at me go!
    I'm like Leland Orser in
    The Bone Collector!
  • #17
    At first, a femur,
    Then a spine, a spare rib too,
    Constant improvement.
    Quote from Myznomer

    Quote from Dantes
    Sorin doesn't actually suck.


    Look, just because he's civilized about it, maybe he puts a napkin in his shirt, maybe he says "Thank you," when he's done; none of that changes the fact that he's feeding on people! He a monstrous- wait, what? Oh, we're talking about playability....carry on then.
  • #18
    Bonehoard's Mantra

    Collect connection
    Prepare for the attachment
    Connect collection


    This one's probably most effective if repeated in as Phyrexian a voice as you can muster.
  • #19
    Hmm. I think I'll try another few - one for each Bonehoard. Kekeke

    Skittering bones.
    Across the world they creep.
    Ossified horror.

    A bad early play,
    Better to wait 'till later.
    Then it will be huge.

    The Grand Architect
    Had such a brilliant vision;
    Dead-comrade Voltron!
    Quote from Myznomer

    Quote from Dantes
    Sorin doesn't actually suck.


    Look, just because he's civilized about it, maybe he puts a napkin in his shirt, maybe he says "Thank you," when he's done; none of that changes the fact that he's feeding on people! He a monstrous- wait, what? Oh, we're talking about playability....carry on then.
  • #20
    Nice idea!

    A germ being observed
    what a broken visage
    the inescapable fate...

    or may be...

    Hope for the breathless
    such a dreamy lighthouse
    a promising revenge

    hmm... What about:

    Hooves and feet of abscent trail
    Throats and arms of empty cause
    make an army out of me.
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  • #21
    Here are my submissions. Grin

    I.
    Dead or alive? Alive!
    How can this be? Walking death?
    I must become one!

    II.
    Death, dying, decay.
    A skull here, a femur there.
    Dance for me puppet.

    III.
    Fabricate Fallen.
    Massive Manipulation.
    Deadly Destruction.
  • #22
    I was checking out the Wikipedia page on the haiku when I found something interesting. Everyone knows that haikus are written as three lines, the first with five syllables, the second with seven, and the third with five. Right? Nope, apparently we were all deceived by our elementary school teachers, because it’s actually 5/7/5 moras. What is a mora? Well, is sort of a measure of sound which is very often shorter than a syllable. James D. McCawley defined a mora as “Something of which a long syllable consists of two and a short syllable consists of one.” Some syllables can even contain three moras!

    For example, “Nagasaki” has four syllables, and also has four moras because these syllables are very simple (na-ga-sa-ki). On the other hand, “Tokyo” has two syllables (if pronounced correctly), but also has four moras since the syllables are more complex (to-o-kyo-o). This is because a long vowel will count as two moras. Weird, right?

    In English, if the vowel sound of a word is stressed, and is also followed by a consonant, then the syllable counts as two moras. For example, “cat” has two moras, but the second syllable of “rabbit” does not (even though the word “bit” alone would have two, thanks to the stress on the vowel). I’m new at this too, but I think “rabbit” would have three total (ra-b-bit), but “rabies” will have four (ra-a-bee-ees) thanks to the long vowel ee.

    Anyway, that’s all for the lesson. Now I’ll try a haiku in the traditional form using moras instead of syllables…


    No metal
    But I must grow
    Bone will do


    I may have totally messed this up, but here's the mora breakdown which I think is right.

    No-me-ta-l
    Bu-t-I-mu-st-gro-o
    Bo-one-wi-ll-do

    This was actually really hard.
  • #23
    Quote from Stardust
    I was checking out the Wikipedia page on the haiku when I found something interesting. Everyone knows that haikus are written as three lines, the first with five syllables, the second with seven, and the third with five. Right? Nope, apparently we were all deceived by our elementary school teachers, because it’s actually 5/7/5 moras. What is a mora? Well, is sort of a measure of sound which is very often shorter than a syllable. James D. McCawley defined a mora as “Something of which a long syllable consists of two and a short syllable consists of one.” Some syllables can even contain three moras!

    For example, “Nagasaki” has four syllables, and also has four moras because these syllables are very simple (na-ga-sa-ki). On the other hand, “Tokyo” has two syllables (if pronounced correctly), but also has four moras since the syllables are more complex (to-o-kyo-o). This is because a long vowel will count as two moras. Weird, right?

    In English, if the vowel sound of a word is stressed, and is also followed by a consonant, then the syllable counts as two moras. For example, “cat” has two moras, but the second syllable of “rabbit” does not (even though the word “bit” alone would have two, thanks to the stress on the vowel). I’m new at this too, but I think “rabbit” would have three total (ra-b-bit), but “rabies” will have four (ra-a-bee-ees) thanks to the long vowel ee.

    Anyway, that’s all for the lesson. Now I’ll try a haiku in the traditional form using moras instead of syllables…


    No metal
    But I must grow
    Bone will do

    I may have totally messed this up, but here's the mora breakdown which I think is right.

    No-me-ta-l
    Bu-t-I-mu-st-gro-o
    Bo-one-wi-ll-do

    This was actually really hard.
    Yes, I've noticed that through the same source as you did, but, since english Haiku does not necessarely follows the same rules as the japanese Haiku (and doing that makes the english ones feel too short for my taste), I decided to ignore it.

    Anyway, thanks for sharing that with us, Stardust. Wink

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  • #24
    Here's my six-parter, just like last time.


    Every thing they kill
    Will always make me stronger
    Raising my power.

    As I destroy him,
    My foe writhes as he dies, and
    Memories are lost.

    In the beginning
    I am but a lowly germ
    Feasting on the dead.

    As my power grows,
    Hunters become the hunted,
    As I use their bones.

    With enough murder
    I shall make some thrones of bone,
    For our Praetor lords.

    You puny Mirrans
    Are nothing compared to our
    Phyrexia's might.
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  • #25
    I decided to approach this from a different perspective.

    The quiet of death
    Fallen of war surround me
    A distant... rattle?
    Last edited by two_eyes: 3/30/2011 11:26:38 PM
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